This is cool. the style definitely gave it the feeling of stream of consciousness and almost a feeling of overwhelming panic. It's hard to critique something like this. most i would say is some breaks in the stream would of been very effective. little stutters maybe to indicate thoughts they are getting hung up on. stuff like that. But awesome nonetheless!
Thank you for the kind words, I'm glad you enjoyed it! And I definitely appreciate the feedback. What's posted was the first draft, so whenever I look to give it a second pass, it will be good to keep your note in mind.
Well that livened up my lunch break -really enjoyed how the pace and mood twisted up together and faded away at the end...form and structure meet subject perfectly.
Thank you so much for the kind words, I’m glad you enjoyed it. I was really trying to illustrate what an average night of insomnia looks like for me, and it sounds like I managed to do it justice.
I used to be afraid of insomnia, which only added to the non-sleep-loop. These days, when it strikes, I try to embrace it, use it and just let my body work it out for itself. It normally takes about two weeks to get myself back to normal patterns... I can't decide if it's 100% in my mind or it's just a natural part of the way my brain works... I know it can be seriously debilitating for some people - so thank you for the open honesty and rawness of your experience - hopefully it will start a conversation - share some experiences and help some people - even if it's just understanding you aren't alone...
I’m having the opposite experience. Used to not care about insomnia. I was young and apathetic and was happy to use the time. Now I’ve built a life I care about and fear the damage to body from losing sleep. So I get frustrated and manic, especially since like you I know one bad night is going to take weeks to recalibrate. Might have to take a page out of your book and just embrace it instead of fighting it so hard.
It was written by a mind on fire at 3AM, that's for sure. More raw than what I'm used to putting out. Feeling naked. But I'm glad to know you're fucking with the rawness, ARC.
This is cool. the style definitely gave it the feeling of stream of consciousness and almost a feeling of overwhelming panic. It's hard to critique something like this. most i would say is some breaks in the stream would of been very effective. little stutters maybe to indicate thoughts they are getting hung up on. stuff like that. But awesome nonetheless!
Thank you for the kind words, I'm glad you enjoyed it! And I definitely appreciate the feedback. What's posted was the first draft, so whenever I look to give it a second pass, it will be good to keep your note in mind.
Well that livened up my lunch break -really enjoyed how the pace and mood twisted up together and faded away at the end...form and structure meet subject perfectly.
Thank you so much for the kind words, I’m glad you enjoyed it. I was really trying to illustrate what an average night of insomnia looks like for me, and it sounds like I managed to do it justice.
I used to be afraid of insomnia, which only added to the non-sleep-loop. These days, when it strikes, I try to embrace it, use it and just let my body work it out for itself. It normally takes about two weeks to get myself back to normal patterns... I can't decide if it's 100% in my mind or it's just a natural part of the way my brain works... I know it can be seriously debilitating for some people - so thank you for the open honesty and rawness of your experience - hopefully it will start a conversation - share some experiences and help some people - even if it's just understanding you aren't alone...
I’m having the opposite experience. Used to not care about insomnia. I was young and apathetic and was happy to use the time. Now I’ve built a life I care about and fear the damage to body from losing sleep. So I get frustrated and manic, especially since like you I know one bad night is going to take weeks to recalibrate. Might have to take a page out of your book and just embrace it instead of fighting it so hard.
yes, this one really zips my zippers
Can't have a friend out in the world all unzipped, no sir.
This shit spirals like a mind on fire at 3AM—dark, funny, brutally honest. Feels like doomscrolling your soul. I fuck with it heavy.
It was written by a mind on fire at 3AM, that's for sure. More raw than what I'm used to putting out. Feeling naked. But I'm glad to know you're fucking with the rawness, ARC.
Raw where you wanna be.