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Pablo Báez's avatar

Love the emotional arc

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P.K. Anthony's avatar

Thanks, Pablo! Honest question for feedback: Do you think it resolves too quickly? I was trying so hard to have something ready for the deadline, and I'm thinking it needs a second pass to build to that final moment better.

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Pablo Báez's avatar

So, it’s not that rushed, but it would benefit from a pass (and tbh what doesn’t?).

It does stand as it is imo, but, at least an additional beat to breathe would serve it well, it would hit harder.

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P.K. Anthony's avatar

Awesome, thanks for answering. It's nice to get a second opinion on adding more, cuz that's a dangerous game to play with a story if it doesn't need it.

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